I forget that to edit well you do at times have to be cold as hell. Treat that $2 line, well, all lines as if they’re throwaways.

I moved the first line to act as a title (I forget most tricks the moment after I use them. Again, MS brain.)

Removed a line about “mom”because it felt like one character too many, in length and person.

Less is more of course we know this, but I have to remember lean is mean.