Okay, E.B, I'm back! Sorry for the long comment! I really enjoy how your writing evokes the feelings of the atmosphere and environment around Max - the fresh air at the port for example. I feel like I am there with him. Lots to like here, but just some of my favourite lines - like a newborn vampire - not to underestimate the terrifying abyss of a man's hidden nightmares that can induce a sudden awakening - the first step, know how long it would take to covet her - circling each other like two snarling rabid animals - a few sexy malts were calling him. The soundscape is great, and is an extra bonus to a good story. The first section of text and the way it is formatted unsettles you while reading, but in a good way!