Yeah, I see what you mean, but I think it can go either way. I've always written as I hear the pauses in my brain, as if I'm narrating the audiobook while simultaneously writing. In this case, I think the comma is needed. It's not just her earliest memory of her hair, it's her earliest strong memory period. So the comma separates out those two. I could have written, "This was her earliest strong memory. It was about being embarrassed about her brilliantly red hair." But that would have b…

Thanks so much Darian. Interestingly, after posting this chapter, I seriously considered renaming the dogs. Spoiler alert: they're relatively minor characters :). But even still, it never occurred to me until after posting that it didn't make much sense for people like Becca and Frankie to name their dogs after literary characters. It would have made more sense to name them Marty and Doc, given the nod to Back to the Future earlier in the chapter (FYI, we had cats with those names. Marty is…